The worst way to start a start is reeling in your reading with unimportant information, you want to start off with a hook that will later become important or something that can get the reader pumping. It’s like the “Sleeping Opening” why do we care if they are sleeping and late for school?
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This… I hate this so much. Especially if it’s lazy exposition.
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MC: Wakes up in the morning, realises she’s late for her first day of school. Somehow, the MC has the time to bump into the bad boy, get bullied by the mean girl and chat with her best friend before coming late to class and having to sit next to the bad boy.
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I don’t really read Episode stories anymore, but I do recall I didn’t like it when the author was like “Sorry, this is my first story/English isn’t my first language/any other form of apology or excuse of how horrible their story may be or why.” At some point I just decided it was a way to take up dialouge lines 
For written, you really have to perfect your introduction. I can’t stand long ones were you tell me everything at once, I want to be exposed to it naturally.
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Psst.
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It’s in my profile
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Ahhh. I’ll read it ASAP 
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I use but that’s because I add cultural facts about the location the story is based in.
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Yay
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Author: " This is my first story. The episodes are really short until insert Episode # Sorry!"
–thank you for telling me that I’m wasting passes 
“This is Suzy Stupid. You will play as her” - “This is Jaxon make him hott -wink wink-”
Author and Character arguing/talking about story/ talking about why a character is a flat out mess. but “they get better”.
– these Author sentences/actions make me immediately leave a story.
CCing an entire family tree, friends, LI, neighbors, third cousin of the mean girls best friend, twice removed.
– I do not want to CC every single character in your story. Period.
Also, on the subject of CC: Don’t use CCing as the entire first episode. I won’t read the next.
Sloppy directing/zooms/spotting and uninteresting narration that describes the LI’s looks/ the place they live/ the mcs every thought.
The dressing game then “oh no! I’m late!”. I don’t know why- but this bothers the hell out of me.
“This is Zayne. He’s your best friend. He is black, gay and loves pancakes!” -Or any other token POC/LGBTQIA+ character added simply to add “diversity” and get “woke” points. It’s insulting, stereotypical and wrong. I exit immediately.
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This post.
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Lol 
Thanks!
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Bad directing. Like if a zoom is off. I won’t stop reading it but it does automatically put it at a lower level
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Same, it’s really distracting and it irritates me.
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Right?!
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Probably fight in the story in the beginning will make me leave. It doesn’t seem right.
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When the whole backstory is revealed…
or showing the love interests too early.
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For the record, I’m about to put a couple of examples, and I think these can actually be done excellently, but they’re more often done horribly, and when they are it’s horrendous.
In medias res. Starting a story in the middle, then flashing back. This can be handled expertly but it’s really not a good idea for a beginner. It can fall flat horribly.
By having a character tell a story. Again, I love The Princess Bride and Final Fantasy X but my god this can be handled poorly
And much like El. “Once Upon a Time.” Unless it’s Shrek and Smashmouth is about to play, get it outta my face
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Spoilers.
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Too much exposition or basic sloppy directing.
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