I’ll pick a few from my own work!
I’m going to link my post “Cringey Cringe-Cringe” so you can have a look at what I’m talking about.
The story is at least 4 years old now, so bear with me!
Critique
I’m writing from the Third Person Close perspective, which means it’s very similar to first person. I’d already had the narrator express her feelings elsewhere, so I don’t need to write “she heard”. If I had just said “one of the police officers sucked in air sharply”, we would have still known that she was the one hearing this noise. So the “she heard” is unnecessary exposition.
You know where people say “Show, don’t tell”? Well, I decided to show and tell, for some reason. Any reasonable person would be able to understand that he was looking for something with the way he’s opening all his draws (should be drawers). Plus, he literally says “Where is it” in the next bloody line! The telling there was completely unnecessary.
Plus, he goes from bellowing to stopping and sighing really quickly without much of a reason why. It makes him seem a little bit unstable 
He’s not.