Honest Opinions On A Scene

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Skylar: Don’t worry, I’ll never do it again, I just wanted to ease the pain.
Skylar: With my past and you ignoring me-
Leah: No, you don’t have to explain yourself.
Leah tears up
Leah: I should have realized I was hurting you…!
Skylar: N-No, don’t cry! I don’t wanna see you cry.
Leah: Why not?! I-
Skylar: BECAUSE I LOVE YOU!
Leah: W-Wha-
Skylar tears up
Skyalr: Not that I matter, because you’ll never-
Leah kisses Skylar

Summery Of What Will Lead Up To This
  • Skylar and Leah meet and become enemies at first
  • They kiss because of truth or dare
  • They eventually become friends
  • They fall for each other but Leah is in denial because she thinks she’s straight
  • Leah accidentally itches Leah and hangs out with someone she doesn’t know
  • Skylar ends up self harming
  • Skylar moves rooms because of her hurt and they argue when she comes to Leah’s room to et back some clothes
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It seems kind of abrupt but it’s neatly written - I don’t much since I haven’t read anything else of the story but it seems pretty good from my point of view

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@melancholy

I added a summary of what happens up until that point. Could you read it and see what you think knowing more? I want to know if there’s anything I should change.

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Okay, this seems interesting and it fits up really fine! Although maybe a little more hesitation on Leah since she still thinks she’s heterosexual but I like it!

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