𝕂𝕒𝕟𝕦𝕓𝕚𝕤𝕙𝔽𝕋'𝕤 𝕊𝕥𝕠𝕣𝕪 ℝ𝕖𝕧𝕚𝕖𝕨 𝕋𝕙𝕣𝕖𝕒𝕕

[WolfGamerGirl37]

I have no idea. I thought I fixed it. I’ll check it again and refix it. I message you when it’s fixed. Sorry for the trouble. That is very strange that error keeps repeating.

[WolfGamerGirl37]

I’m sorry for all the trouble. I finally got episode 2 fixed. I missed some of the goto’s on accident. I’m checking the last 2 episodes for anymore errors.

[Kanubish]

Okay. And please make sure that the same error isn’t repeated on other chapters of the story too.

[WolfGamerGirl37]

That’s what I’m doing now. I have someone helping me with the script and checking the story too.

[WolfGamerGirl37]

Okay, I have check the last two episodes. I did not see any of the same errors we were talking about in them. The story should be good for you to look at now. Again very sorry about that error showing up. It had to do with some goto’s not being marked correctly.

[Kanubish]

Bump

[Kanubish]

Bump…

[Kanubish]

Bump

[MeghanWrites]

Story’s name+author’s name: the witch trials by pockychocostick
Plot: many many side plots, but basically a lot of people aren’t humans.
Genre(s): Fantasy, adventure… slight romance? Mystery action… the list goes on
Number of chapters: 1
Story’s cover (not required, but recommended) I don’t have one yet, so it’s just the regular Wattpad default cover

[Kanubish]

Review of the story: The Witch Trials by @MeghanWrites.

Thank you for waiting and for allowing me to review your story

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Introduction: my advice - write a synopsis, telling a bit about the story. You haven’t written anything that could help the readers understand what is the story about (main idea).

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After the “I have planned (please hear the sarcasm)” part, I believe adding a point (.) is necessary

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Writing the word “boyfriend” with a capital letter wasn’t necessary unless it was the first word on the sentence.

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Correction: “He probably had had an amazing night in her king-size (without d) bed with that hoe Amy”.

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“Sat a chair at the table”? Remove the “a chair” part and write “sat at the table with legs crossed” instead. After this sentence, put a point before the word “she”.

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It is “shut off” with a space when it’s a verb. “Shutoff” (without space) is a noun.

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In this part, you didn’t use tense correctly. Write “Ariva and her dad have never really been close”.

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“…racer out”? From what I know and checked, there is no such phrase.

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So the first chapter was not much interesting for the beginning. But maybe there is more.
On the prompt thread, I will ask you a few questions about the story.

And as I said, you should have written a synopsis, telling a bit about the story (like, what’s the story about). In addition, you should have written each word of the title with a capital letter (The Witch Trials)

After asking you a few questions, I will give you my advice if it’s needed.

[MeghanWrites]

Thanks! This was really helpful

“Say a chair at the table.” Was supposed to be “sat on a chair at the table,” and racer was supposed to say raced.

I’m not the best at spelling

[Kanubish]

Everything is good. Your grammar wasn’t that bad. Believe me, I saw worse.

By the way, do you want us to discuss on your story on the prompt class thread or via PM?

[MeghanWrites]

PM.that way I won’t lose it in all my notifications

[celestialkitten]

KanubishBump

[anon80318563]

Are you still doing reviews? If so, I want one for my story.

Story’s name+author’s name: Miss Understood // Marianna Escalante
Plot: Emilianna is a spoiled, entitled, bratty adult who thinks the world revolves around her. But somehow, she ends up working with kids who are more spoiled and entitled than she is.
Genre(s): Comedy
Number of chapters: 5 (well, I’m publishing chapter 6 tomorrow )
Story’s cover (not required, but recommended)

[liyahsdiamond]

I’m gonna slowly add my story here.

Story’s name+author’s name: Halloween: Deadly Nightshade
Plot: “The balance of black and white.” A woman is murdered and her ghost is out for revenge. Ambition, betrayal, revenge and wicked schemes play a deadly game in Clifton. Who’s next?
Genre(s): Thriller, mystery, drama
Number of chapters: 4
Story’s cover:

Link:

The Best Stories Are Worth Sharing: Deadly Nightshade

[liyahsdiamond]

I really like your reviews, and I miss them @Kanubish!

[Kanubish]

Thank you, chococarmela ! I appreciate it.

I will start reviewing stories again soon.

[WolfGamerGirl37]

@Kanubish sorry for all the issues my story caused. That error was really annoying so I feel bad you had to deal with it repeating like it did.