Yeah but tbh I don’t like that either, like that makes it worse for me. Like I don’t like that trauma is being used like that… Like I understand it makes the story entertaining and stuff but trauma is just such a heavy thing and very sensitive and I don’t like that it’s used that way.
2 Likes
This was a draft for a new version anyways. And it’s not for entertainment. I would never use trauma as an entertainment factor
1 Like
Anna’s trauma is real, and this is a way to show the audience that, being yelled at is a big trigger, and often gives Anna flashbacks. In this instance, Anna’s outburst was her trying to fight her demons and fight back the flashback
Why? It’s way more bad then you think Allie.
I’ll say what I said last time again. You shouldn’t be telling us these things. You should be showing us in the scene
1 Like
I mean I get that but personally disagree with it. Like idk I think you could have had a different scene where she was getting yelled at for a different reason, then she got triggered. I just can’t relate to this scene at all as a person who has gotten triggered before. Like again I know people are different but-
I did.
I have to go to class now, but if wanna continue this discussion when I get back I’d be happy to do so.
2 Likes
Did you do research? Watch YouTube videos, ask close friends, explore on Google, relate to Anna? I just, this needs much improvement. You should study up on psychology
But you didn’t show it well. That’s what people are saying. You aren’t showing it in a realistic and understandable way
2 Likes
I’m done. I see now the draft part of this scene was stupid to make. Maybe I should just keep the orignial.
Last thing imma say: When I get triggered or have a panic attack I don’t cry, I have overwhelming internal feelings that make me feel like I want to run but i can’t. I feel hot sometimes like i’m gonna puke. It lasts for a while. We should be seeing some of that at least.
2 Likes
No, you just need to take some advice gurl!
Advice? All I’m getting is people saying it’s not right to put the trauma in the scene.
No one said that? They just said you have to portray it better.
1 Like
based on what I’m seeing here on this thread, all I’m going to ask is that if you can’t take feedback for your story, don’t open and make and actively seek feedback for it then get mad at ppl who are giving you that advice
they’re only trying to be helpful
5 Likes
Well, you need to put it in right. It isn’t okay how Eli’s dad is acting, but some people be like that!
Just study up!! Make threads and ask questions
Anna: (No! No…)
Anna: (Not again…)
Anna starts shaking
Anna: (I can’t move…)
Anna: (My god… I feel sick.)
Well, this should be spread out throughout her talking about her trauma
And, the conversation should’ve ended sooner